E-asttle Practice Writing - Persuasive

I am aiming to improve my writing in the following 3 areas: Organisation, punctuation and spelling.

I will do this by: I will reorganise my work into paragraphs instead of a big grouping of words. I will add more vocabulary such as " ! ? to improve my writing. I will also try to add in better, harder to spell words to make my writing a higher level.

Essay:
Motorsport encourages road users to drive dangerously. I disagree with this statement. Do you agree with my point of view? Motorsport is a form of entertainment that, I do have to agree, can be dangerous but most of the time drivers know what to do with their vehicles so that everyone else is safe.

I do not think that motorsport encourages people to drive dangerously because not all dangerous drivers watch motorsport. Motorsport is a professional sport which takes many years to master so you can drive/ride your vehicle to the best of your ability.

Motorsport does not encourage dangerous driving because people can learn their driving skills from family and friends when they watch them drive. Most motorsports are teaching people to drive because of the ways that you have to drive vehicles. It has been proven that race car drivers are more cautious on the road. With the way that you have to drive a race car, you are always checking your surroundings to make sure that if you have an opportunity to defend or gain a position so it teaches you that we need to watch how we drive.

People do not learn dangerous driving from motorsport because when you watch motorsport people have to make sure they do not hit another driver or car because each driver has a set of rules they must follow or they can be penalised. With the rules for some motorsport classes, they do not allow contact between cars so each driver must make accurate, pin-point moves to ensure that they do not lose positions or gain a penalty. A penalty in motorsport is like a ticket on the street because if you get a penalty for contact you could lose your position or even get a fine. Drivers in motorsport have to be very careful with the way they place their car/vehicle just like on a road every driver must be aware of their surroundings so that you do not hit another vehicle. Some people may watch some forms of motorsport such as Derbys and say "This encourages people to drive dangerously so they can keep to the rules" but that is the only time those people will drive like that. Some forms of motorsport hate the idea of dangerously driving so at some points you can get banned from the track.

So this proves that motorsport does not encourage people to drive dangerously. I race a car and I feel safer in my race car the I do in a traffic jam mainly because people at the track keep themselves at a safe distance but on the road, some people drive erratically behind me or in front of me.

Key:
Organization: I have made my work go from a big blob of work into an organized, paragraphed essay.
Punctuation: I have highlighted the added speak marks that I have used.
Spelling: I could not find any hard words to add to my work.

Essay Pre-Planning:

Describe a relationship between 2 or more characters in the text. Explain how this relationship helped you to understand at least 1 of the characters.

Wind powered land boat class project.

Aim: To create a land boat that can go 10 meters while gaining velocity.

Method: We will use paper to create our sail which will attach to the metal rod. The metal rod will be screwed into the trolley/ base. The sail will hopefully catch more air and turn that air into velocity. We will use a leaf blower to create more airflow while we are outside.


Equipment list:

• 1m of Paper.
• 2m of Tape.
• Cardboard Square.
• A Metal Rod.
• Trolley with Wheels.

Research:

Results:
Our land boat went 16.89m with a time of 14.7sec which means that our velocity was: 1.1489ms1

Discussion:
Our land boat was a bit different from everyone else's because of our shape and our design because our one had a backwards sail. Our one could have been better if we put more thought into it and created a better land boat but we decided that our one was fine.

Conclusion:
In conclusion, our land boat did not do the best in the class so we could make some small improvements but for us, our land boat was a success and went very well.

Essay Pre-planning: Children of Blood and Bone.

My key event is going to be when Inan is sent by King Saran to burn down Ilorin. (Zelie's home town). My important character is going to be Zelie because she is the main character in this book. My character has changed from being cool, calm and collected to being very very upset, and rage-filled. My character has also changed from being scared to fight and not wanting to hurt too many people to wanting vengeance and trying to kill Inan at every chance she gets. Zelie also changes from being a scared little girl and being thought of as just a maggot/ slave to being able to scare all the guards off and causing the world to realise that maji can be scary but can also be very very nice people.

Children of Blood and Bone: Chapter 79: Zelie

A message I take from this scene is that everyone has a breaking point and that betrayal can cause people to go from their happy normal self to a very broken, upset person. Inan breaks when his father tells him about why he hates the maji and after that he stopped believing in the maji and the ritual. Zelie has a feeling that she has lost everything including her family and her magic. She turns from a pursuing little girl into someone who can't feel anything mentally. Her beliefs have changed from the fact that she can do this and she can save everyone.  To now being like a turtle, she moves freely but when someone who has hurt her, she runs back into her shell with nothing.

Are students addicted to their cellphones? If so is this a problem?.

To an extent students are addicted to their phones due to social media and websites. To many people the way we use our cellphones can be addicting and cause trouble to our health and life style. I do not stand on either side of this subject, I believe that some people are addicted to their phones but some are not addicted to their phones. For most students they use their phones for more then social media. There can be people who cause issues towards parents, teachers and other students just because people ask them to get off their phone . While some people will get off their phone as soon as they are asked. For some students their phones are their lives but some can live without them for ages. Some use their phones for safety reasons and others use it for the work they have to complete for school. Some people only have their phone to contact parents, caregivers and family members. While others have it to be popular and to post images. Some also have it to bully people and cause harm to other people. Some people say that every one is addicted to their phones but some can live without them for ever. A large group of our population uses their phones for work and schooling.

Change of Technology

Definition of Technology: The application of scientific knowledge for practical purposes, especially in industry. "advances in computer technology" machinery and equipment developed from the application of scientific knowledge. "it will reduce the industry's ability to spend money on new technology" the branch of knowledge dealing with engineering or applied sciences.

Technology Change slides.

Our slides compare the old and new types of technology in different categories.